Fellow writers please evaluate this piece of writing! PLEASE!!?

This is very clever. A personified book's point of view. I am a librarian istant who watches exactly what you describe. Kids sitting in front of screens, playing games and checking their facebooks. Thankfully reading (and writing) isn't gone yet! With teachers giving summer reading lists to their cles of clic books, kids are still being exposed to great literature. Your piece is very good! Now "edit,edit,edit..." (as I've heard many a professional writer say)